Kate, this all looks good, as always. <3 I don't usually comment 'cos mostly I'd just say IAWTC and AOL.
I have a couple proofreading nitpicks. I apologise if you didn't actually mean that and were being funny; I've been up since ass o'clock and also therefore may not pick everything and as you can tell by this huge sentence my editing is NOT THE BEST ANYWAY. But onward!
That's an extraordinary record, and frankly, I'm rather shamed but it. IMHO, Ms Moon is right when she says "the business of a citizen is the welfare of the nation" - and those are clearly not empty words.
I think this is how an immigrant community's integration into the "mainstream" should be judged: by their their involvement, their participation, their service.
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Date: 2010-09-20 12:26 pm (UTC)I have a couple proofreading nitpicks. I apologise if you didn't actually mean that and were being funny; I've been up since ass o'clock and also therefore may not pick everything and as you can tell by this huge sentence my editing is NOT THE BEST ANYWAY. But onward!
That's an extraordinary record, and frankly, I'm rather shamed but it. IMHO, Ms Moon is right when she says "the business of a citizen is the welfare of the nation" - and those are clearly not empty words.
I think this is how an immigrant community's integration into the "mainstream" should be judged: by their their involvement, their participation, their service.
Have bolded the bits that jump out.
I hope you get some sleep soon! :(